Poem my lil' boy & I wrote together for an RSPB competition, we didn't win but here it is anyway lol

Sof & Tob 01/09/2010 23:36

'tweet' said the robin sitting on the garden fence -'tweet tweet' replied the blue tit,... & so they would commence: - ' A lion in Africa is really quite lazy -a bit like that sleeping ladybird perched upon that daisy' - 'but when you hear it's mighty roar, -you better fly faster than you ever have before, -he'd never race you, -but he would chase you, -if his tummy were to rumble loud, -he'd grab you & stand upon you, mighty & proud -& then eat you, feathers & all' - 'no no, a lion wouldn't eat something so small, -they like zebra & deer, -us little birds have nothing to fear' - 'but... would a lion eat a snake,or would a lion catch fish from a lake?'- 'snakes, no I imagine not, -their poison burns like chilly, it's way too hot' - 'but a nice big fish, -my cousin the penguin says that's the tastiest dish'- 'well if you ask me, -red berries are the greatest delicacy' - 'would a lion eat a frog?-or a toad sat croaking upon a log?'- 'No, I don't imagine that,-when they blow up their cheeks they get all big & fat,-they'd get stuck in the lion's throat...'- 'Would a lion eat a wild goat,-a cow, a horse, or even a sheep?- Yes all those animals would make the lion leap-& pounce, he'd devour their every ounce,-they'd be quite easy prey-unless they run fast & far away'- 'tweet' said the robin-'tweet tweet' replied the blue tit-'you can only escape a lion-with either speed or wit' -

Cartimandua 02/09/2010 02:10

Well done! This would make a lovely little illustrated book :-)

Make the boy interested in natural history if you can; it is better than games [Robert Falcon Scott]
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Anonymous 02/09/2010 02:18

Hi Sof & Tob

Great poem and so great to see a young person taking an interest in wildlife in such a creative way.

Thanks for sharing this with us

Pipit
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Sparrow 02/09/2010 02:21

Hi Sof and Tob,

What a lovely little tale. Thank you for sharing it with us. It's a winner for me!

Cheers, Linda.

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Goldcrest 02/09/2010 02:33

Hello and welcome. It is a lovely poem, well done and thanks for sharing it with us. I really enjoyed reading it.

Kind regards Jane.
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Brenda H 02/09/2010 02:42 in reply to Sparrow

Hello Sof and Tob. A lovely poem full of questions that a child would ask. Thanks for letting us read it.
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Anonymous 16/09/2010 21:41 in reply to Brenda H

Hi Sof and tob and welcome to the Forum. Enjoy yourself here

What a sweet collection of words from a young persons imagination

Fabulous to read and there are so many little bits that make you wonder - it is like the coat of many colours in the literature sense of the word.

Regards

Kathy and Dave
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Sof & Tob 17/09/2010 22:13 in reply to Anonymous

Hi You All, thank you so much for the compliments. I'm not here often as I don't have much computer access or computer luck (always connection problems), so just dropping in to say 'thank you for the kind words' and I'm glad you're all liking/ enjoying my lil' mite & I's poetic efforts... :D
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Val 04/02/2011 01:27 in reply to Sof & Tob

I love that poem, someone said it would make a good book, it truly would.

Best wishes

Val.
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