Haiku

Ive been having a play with haiku over the last couple of weeks (during a bout of man flu!) and I thought I'd throw a couple of my efforts out here for your perusal. For those unfamiliar with the format it's a non-rhyming 3-line poem with five, seven, five syllables. I love the challenge of creating a broad picture on such a narrow canvas.

desperate to breed

restart the cycle of life

urgency of spring

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sun breaks horizon

grebe peers through mist on water

images of dawn

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swept plume bandit mask

harvesting natures bounty

waxwing irruption

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hungry chick pleading

unsuspecting pigeon struck

peregrine provides

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Regards

Ian

  • Clever stuff Ian, not easy to achieve!  

    How many others counting on fingers as they read? Lol

     

     2013 photos & vids here

    eff37 on Flickr

  • In reply to WendyBartter:

    It's not easy is it Wendy, I have a friend in NZ that tried to educate me in Haiku writing a few years ago, she would put hers on the back of envelopes (as we were still writing letters back then) just to cheer up the postmen she said!   Well done Seaman, those are really good.

    Lot to learn

  • In reply to gaynorsl:

    Hi Ian, hope you have now recovered from your bout of flu and I see you came up with an interesting challenge for yourself !   Although I've heard of Haiku I didn't know exactly what it entailed and your poems are really clever.       I can't compete with your genius as I'm still need to count on my fingers  lol     but purely for fun ..........     and I hope its 5, 7, 5     !!!

    Dawns awakening

    Birds beginning to chatter

    Get bird feeders out  !   

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    Regards, Hazel 

    "Each kindness shown to birds or men is sure to flutter back again" 

  • In reply to HAZY:

    Hi all thanks for your kind feedback. I'm much better thanks Hazel and have been out today around Old Moor for the first time in weeks. I do like your effort but beware - it's addictive. You'll be walking around, see something and a line will pop into your head! Which is fine except for the next ten minutes you'll find yourself searching for the other two lol.

  • In reply to see gull:

    lol Ian !   It's a good job I didn't see this post before I ventured out to Deeside nature reserve eary this morning or I may have missed the fleeting fly by from a Hen Harrier  lol       As you say, it could become quite addictive but always good to keep the grey matter working !

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    Regards, Hazel 

    "Each kindness shown to birds or men is sure to flutter back again" 

  • In reply to HAZY:

    It certainly does that Hazel. And that's no bad thing at my age!

  • In reply to see gull:

    Nice work Ian :-) Perhaps we should have a haiku of the month thread....

    "Let loose the Kraken!"

  • In reply to Stuart Vine:

    Haiku of the month

    siskins on feeders

    visions in black yellow green

    a joy to behold

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    drum roll in the woods

    great spotted announces spring

    with gusto and joy

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    Regards

    Ian

  • In reply to see gull:

    Peregrines laying

    All at once it seems to me

    Frantic recording

     

     2013 photos & vids here

    eff37 on Flickr

  • In reply to WendyBartter:

    Great work. I love the haiku.Such compact imagery and the bonus of the pondering after-effects!